March 16, 2009
Monday Poem
Hydrant
Jim Culleny
Steel sentinel on our street.
Its domed yellow cap
topped with a wrench-ready fitting,
its three short blue arms wrench-ready too,
its stumpy red torso squat in the snow
ringed round its base with brown March mush
in late winter when our longing for sun
is most poignant; when it hallucinates
buds and birds;
when it wants to crank the earth
a little further along in its revolution
at least a months-worth more into its arc
to sooner reach that sweet relationship with Ra;
—it’s then I ask Ra to ask you to love me
as I love you until Hell freezes over or
until Ra’s firemen hook-up the waters of love
to douse the devil’s rival flame, or till I wise up,
whichever comes last.
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First the rather sereene still-life description, then the sudden clumsy love declaration with the "till hell freezes over" cliche and the gushing water (because its bursting out to strongly for you to bother with elegance) ending with the wry, self-depricating "or till I wise up" twist.
Did she like it?
Posted by: aguy109 | Mar 17, 2009 10:14:30 AM
As far as I can see, life's not all elegance, so poetry will often not be either.
Life's also brimming with a million fulfilled cliche's. I just try not to put too many in the same poem.
Jim :)
Posted by: Jim | Mar 17, 2009 11:30:40 PM
Oh, and she hasn't told me.
Jim
Posted by: Jim | Mar 17, 2009 11:31:22 PM
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